Could you listen to see if my self-introduction is OK or not?
Could you check to see if my self-introduction makes sense?
ご質問ありがとうございます。
① "Could you listen to see if my self-introduction is OK or not?"=「私の自己紹介が大丈夫か聞いてくれる?」
② "Could you check to see if my self-introduction makes sense?"=「私の自己紹介がちゃんと理解できるかチェックしてくれる?」
ご参考までに。